In today’s competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents’ absence. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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The increase in the market for both male and female professionals has made many families leave their parenting duties for work, polarizing two situations: Giving a good
life
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for their children and
also
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, giving bad familiar support.
This
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essay will discuss both of these situations and show my personal opinion on how parents can combine work and quality time when at home. On the one hand, cloths, health insurance, school, and entertainment cost more now that in the past 5 years. Provide a good quality of
life
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to the children is a parenting duty, and the benefits can be observed by the indices of satisfaction. The Houston University has made
an
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a
social assessment at the
high-school
a public secondary school usually including grades 9 through 12
highschool
"Winners Layers” by asking the
studants
a learner who is enrolled in an educational institution
students
what they loved more about their
life
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and 80% said that having a
comfort
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comfortable
life
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was the number one on their list.
On the other hand
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, giving a comfort
life
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can mean parenting absence. Feeling the guilt for don't have time
to
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for
the children, parents usually compensate the lack of familiar support with
presents
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the presents
, building a wrong idea about love during the infant
chidhood
the time of person's life when they are a child
childhood
. The majority cases of depression
affects
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affect
wealth
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wealthy
teenagers leading them to alcohol and
drugs
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drug
consumption, due the issues presented in their development. To conclude, all
child
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children
needs
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need
to be
care
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careful
careless
carefully
, and have a good
life
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, but lack of family support can be
devasteding
making light of
devastating
. In my opinion, material benefits
can not
can not
cannot
prevail over the familiar, the balance is crucial, and to make it possible, I
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
that expanding quality time with the children is the key to reinforce that love
can not
can not
cannot
be bought.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dual-income households
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • emotional well-being
  • parental involvement
  • social development
  • extracurricular activities
  • childcare solutions
  • time management
  • career advancement
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