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Topic: Nowadays, more people would rather purchase food than cook at home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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e
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At
moment, a lot of people prefer to buy
food
 to make it by them self. In my opinion, there are costs and benefits of
this
 situation. In
this
 essay, I will explain about advan
tages and
Suggestion
the advantages
disadvantages of
this
 trend with some examples to demonstrate some points. It is no doubt that buying
food
 is more practical than make it by our self. Because of
this
 reason, many people especially who do not have much time to provide by thems
elf pref
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
er
this
 way.
For example
 : bu
ss
Accept space
:
i
nesman who
a person engaged in commercial or industrial business (especially an owner or executive)
businessman
is ve
ry busy man choose to b
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has very busy man chosen
is very busy man choose
uy
food
 rather than cook at their house. Another reason why people prefer to consume
food
 outside is because they are not handy at
this
 skill. Because of
this
 reason, they prefer to eat in restaurant because it has more
delicious cuisine than
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a more delicious cuisine
food
that
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the food
 they made by them self. I do not overlook the other side too. In my opinion,
this
 trend has disadvantages
such
 as health risk caused by non-hygiene
food
.
For example
, in
this
 day, many people suffer from disse
ase caus
an impairment of health or a condition of abnormal functioning
diseases
ed by consuming unclean
food
. More
over, in
in addition
Moreover
this
 modern life, major
ity of p
Suggestion
the majority
a majority
eople does
not concern abou
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do not concern
t their healthy life
style as l
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
ong as they do not hungry.
This
 reaso
ns infl
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reason
i
ct more
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inflicts
 In conclusion, there are advantage and disadvantage of
this
 occasion. I am really sure that consuming
food
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