Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Music
is known as a universal language because of its quality of bringing people together irrespective of their age and culture. In my view, I agree that
music
has
this
magical power that touches hearts of
a
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an
evey
(used of count nouns) each and all of the members of a group considered singly and without exception
every
evil
person which eventually leads to bring them together.
To begin
with,
although
the meaning of a particular
song
is unknown, we tend to enjoy that
song
.
For instance
, a
song
written in
different language
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different languages
a different language
can become one of the our
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
song
without
knowning
evidencing the possession of inside information
knowing
the exact meaning of it.
This
specific nature of
music
helps us to interact with similar minded people. Evidently, culture
become
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becomes
irrelevant when we consider about the
music
.
Futhermore
in addition
Furthermore
, there are a variety of musical instruments and styles all over the world. Yet, we tend to close our eyes and enjoy when we hear most of them.
This
is Because, it is the melody and the rhythm we like to hear in a particular
song
or even a play rather than the meaning of it.
Moreover
, some operas and orchestras
do not even contains
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do not even contain
a single word.
However
, people from around the world prefer listening to those shows for hours.  Another factor involves in
music
is that it
attract
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attracts
different categories of ages. The primary
exmple
an item of information that is typical of a class or group
example
examples
of
this
is some musical compositions survive through generations
such
as
song
"Everything I Do" by Bryan Adams. Which was released in my fathers times still it is one of the
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
entertainment of mine as well as my father's.
Therefore
,
age
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the age
of a certain person does not quite matter regarding the
music
which
make
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makes
it
enjoyble
affording satisfaction or pleasure
enjoyable
for any person.  To recapitulate, when it comes to the
music
age and the culture does not provide any
siginificant
important in effect or meaning
significant
difference because
people mainly
Accept comma addition
people, mainly
listen to the
rithem
the basic rhythmic unit in a piece of music
rhythm
and melody of a
song
or a play
dispite
regardless of, in defiance of
despite
the language and the meaning of it.
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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