Nowadays, it is possible to move ocean creatures from their natural habitat at sea and have them relocated to marine parks for the purpose of education and entertainment. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages? Explain your reasons and support them with specific examples.

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Living beings of oceans are now being shifted to

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parks for an intention to gain education and entertainment. I believe that doing

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, the environment of the oceans is being harmed more than providing education to people. The life cycle of

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animals is getting disturbed. Due to

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, it is

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causing high

tidal wind

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tidal, wind

and some environmental problems

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, in the

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, each and every creature depends on each other like big fish eat small fish and big fish is eaten by a shark. If one of its creatures is taken away from the

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, in the

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the number of a particular

marine

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animal will rise rapidly. The consequences will be a particular

species

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will extinct.

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has already been a case of a region, where a

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species

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has already got

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had already got

have already got

had already gotten

have already gotten

disappeared, due to

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of it by the other

sea

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animals.

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, it is

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causing harm to our environment like the way tidal winds are increasing, it is causing disasters like flood, tsunami. Actually, what happens, if the

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animals become less

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sea

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, warm winds, which they absorb will increase and cause water to move faster in an

ocean

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. A report shows that more than five thousand people die every year, due to

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the tsunami

and flood and decline of

species

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in the

ocean

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is one of the

reason

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reasons

. In conclusion,

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people find it jovial while watching

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animals in the public park exhibition, they need to understand that it is

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resulting an inappropriate environment, where it would be difficult for other

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species and humans to

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species and humans

survive. So, its drawbacks are more than getting

education

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an education

out of it.

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, it should not be allowed.

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Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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283 words

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