Nowadays, it is possible to move ocean creatures from their natural habitat at sea and have them relocated to marine parks for the purpose of education and entertainment. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages? Explain your reasons and support them with specific examples.

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Living beings of oceans are now being shifted to

marine

parks for an intention to gain education and entertainment. I believe that doing

this

, the environment of the oceans is being harmed more than providing education to people. The life cycle of

marine

animals is getting disturbed. Due to

this

, it is

also

causing high

tidal wind

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tidal, wind

and some environmental problems

Firstly

, in the

ocean

, each and every creature depends on each other like big fish eat small fish and big fish is eaten by a shark. If one of its creatures is taken away from the

sea

, in the

ocean

the number of a particular

marine

animal will rise rapidly. The consequences will be a particular

species

will extinct.

This

has already been a case of a region, where a

sea

species

has already got

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had already got

have already got

had already gotten

have already gotten

disappeared, due to

overconsumption

of it by the other

sea

animals.

Secondly

, it is

also

causing harm to our environment like the way tidal winds are increasing, it is causing disasters like flood, tsunami. Actually, what happens, if the

sea

animals become less

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sea

, warm winds, which they absorb will increase and cause water to move faster in an

ocean

. A report shows that more than five thousand people die every year, due to

tsunami

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the tsunami

and flood and decline of

species

in the

ocean

is one of the

reason

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reasons

. In conclusion,

although

people find it jovial while watching

marine

animals in the public park exhibition, they need to understand that it is

also

resulting an inappropriate environment, where it would be difficult for other

species and humans to

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species and humans

survive. So, its drawbacks are more than getting

education

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an education

out of it.

Hence

, it should not be allowed.

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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