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Nowadays, it is possible to move ocean creatures from their natural habitat at sea and have them relocated to marine parks for the purpose of education and entertainment. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages? Explain your reasons and support them with specific examples.

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Living beings of oceans are now being shifted to
marine
 parks for an intention to gain education and entertainment. I believe that doing
this
, the environment of the oceans is being harmed more than providing education to people. The life cycle of
marine
 animals is getting disturbed. Due to
this
, it is
also
 causing high
tidal wind
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tidal, wind
 and some environmental problems
Firstly
, in the
ocean
, each and every creature depends on each other like big fish eat small fish and big fish is eaten by a shark. If one of its creatures is taken away from the
sea
, in the
ocean
 the number of a particular
marine
 animal will rise rapidly. The consequences will be a particular
species
 will extinct.
This
 has already been a case of a region, where a
sea
species
has already got
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had already got
have already got
had already gotten
have already gotten
 disappeared, due to
overconsumption
 of it by the other
sea
 animals.
Secondly
, it is
also
 causing harm to our environment like the way tidal winds are increasing, it is causing disasters like flood, tsunami. Actually, what happens, if the
sea
 animals become less
in
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at
sea
, warm winds, which they absorb will increase and cause water to move faster in an
ocean
. A report shows that more than five thousand people die every year, due to
tsunami
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the tsunami
 and flood and decline of
species
 in the
ocean
 is one of the
reason
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reasons
. In conclusion,
although
 people find it jovial while watching
marine
 animals in the public park exhibition, they need to understand that it is
also
 resulting an inappropriate environment, where it would be difficult for other
species and humans to
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species and humans
 survive. So, its drawbacks are more than getting
education
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an education
 out of it.
Hence
, it should not be allowed.

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