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Some people believe that the advent of economical air travel has been very beneficial by making international travel more accessible, while others argue that it has had a very negative impact.

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International
air
travel
 has become progressively cheaper over the past decade.
As a result
, many more people arc utilising
this
 mode of transport more frequently. Proponents of cheap
air
travel
 argue that it provides more opportunities in the areas of
business
 and tourism.
For instance
, it is now cheaper for
business
 people
to attend
Suggestion
attending
 meetings or conferences abroad,
thus
 contributing to a global knowledge economy and opening up
business
 opportunities and economic growth.
Furthermore
, there has been huge tourism growth as access to some countries has become cheaper through reduced
airplane
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airline
 fares. For these countries, the economic benefits of tourism are clear more money is spent locally.
However
, others feel that cheap
air
travel
 has associated with detrimental environmental costs.
Firstly
, aeroplanes use huge amounts of fuel, a non-renewable resource. They
also
 emit high levels of carbon dioxide, which is the main contributor to climate change and global
wanning
the process of becoming warmer; a rising temperature
warming
warning
. At a more local level,
air
travel
 has a negative effect on
air
 quality and noise levels. Cheap airlines offering £2 flights from London to Rome and Madrid only exacerbate the problem by encouraging more people to fly for
shorter
Suggestion
short
 stays,
thus
 compounding the environmental effects. All in all, it is certain that people will continue to utilise
air
travel
, as it is so convenient for
business
 and leisure.
However
, in my view, it would be beneficial for travellers to be more aware and informed of the true cost of their
air
travel
 in relation to the environment and to make their choices
accordingly
.

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