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In many places, new homes are needed, but the only place available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What it your opinion about this?

#places #homes #place #countryside #people
It is indisputable inevitable fact that more controversy
is going
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has been going
has gone
 on in recent days to build homes for the people
at
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in
of
 the countryside due to the lack of land scarcity. Is it really fascinating to construct houses in
outskirts
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the outskirts
? Well, some possible reasons can be added in order to avoid some adverse effects.
Firstly
, the areas surrounding the
city
 are accelerating, peaceful with widened roads and green trees which gives visitors an enjoyable ride in and out of the
city
.
For example
 - Tourists will get a good impression while entering into the
city
,
this
 approach will increase the visitors.
Secondly
, the buildings in the
city
 centre are congested and polluted with many vehicles and noises. If we start building the homes in
outskirts
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the outskirts
 which in turn leads to congestion and occupy much
spaces
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space
. The higher authorities must order to control the modern civilization projects in the
city
 surroundings. To conclude, I am
opined
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opining
 to give the information on
aforementioned statement
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the aforementioned statement
 that
countryside
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the countryside
 should be protected and
done
produced by a manufacturing process
made
 some improvements in order to make people an enjoyable experience into the
city
 but not by building houses.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Environmental conservation
  • Natural habitats
  • Biodiversity
  • Ecosystems
  • Disruption
  • Sustainable development
  • Housing density
  • High-rise buildings
  • Urban expansion
  • Renovation
  • Infrastructure costs
  • Local rural economies
  • Quality of life
  • Community cohesion
  • Noise pollution
  • Green space
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