More and more people buy a wide range of household goods like television, microwave oven and rice cooker. Do you think this is positive or negative development?

Household
appliances play an important role in our home so the quantity of people purchasing television, microwave oven and rice cooker
is dramatically increasing
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are dramatically increasing
day by day.
Although
there are some positive aspects of
this
trend but
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trend, but
I think that there are a
lot
of demerits that shouldn’t be ignored. Advances in
household
technologies bring many benefits undoubtedly.
Firstly
, they revolutionize
people life
Suggestion
a person's life
person's life
peoples' life
by helping people to do all tasks without any difficulty.
Therefore
, people can work efficiently and have more free time so that they can spend on taking care of their families. Modern
household
goods not only upgrade living standard but
also
provide a large entertainment source
such
as watching TV, playing video games which
gradually becomes
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gradually become
an important part of our life, especially children.
On the other hand
, I think that people nowadays are over-reliant on
household
goods. In fact,
those
plural of "this"
these
appliances can lead to a
lot
of health risks if people use it constantly.
For example
, children usually keep their eyes glued on screens all
day which
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day, which
can affect negatively not only
on
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with
their eyes but
also
on their characters.
Moreover
, people regularly spend a
lot
of money buying goods without weighting up
pros
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the pros
and cons even though they are unnecessary sometimes. The reason for
this
case is that people are usually swayed by
advertisements so
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advertisements, so
that many
brand
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brands
can take
advantages
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advantage
of customers, make them buy all the thing appeared on TV. For a long term, people will waste a
lot
of money buying
merchandises
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merchandise
,
then
this
trend will affect negatively on both individuals and the whole country’s economy. In conclusion,
although
using
household
goods
has
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have
many merits, people should think carefully before making a decision in order to avoid purchasing uncontrollably.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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