Many developed countries now have large numbers of people over the age of 65. What problems might this cause? How can the problems be solved?

Nowadays many
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Nowadays, many
developed nations are facing main
issue
with old
age
, due to
this
countries
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country
are facing several problems for
this
but certain
messagure
a communication (usually brief) that is written or spoken or signaled
message
could prevent
this
issue
.
Firstly
, In several established
countires
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
like America and Canada
are facing
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is facing
major
issue
is no young
generation
are
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is
available to take forward
hence
it's causing many issues like medical and
employement
the state of being employed or having a job
employment
. Due to old
age
people government
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people, government
is spending much money on their safety purpose in medicals
hence
it's
over burden
burden with too much work or responsibility
overburden
to revenue
generation
and same time government benefits and not reaching to poor people.
Secondly
, Employment due to no youth many jobs are not filling
to
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in
the up to the mark
therefore
work is pending and the growth is not moving forward.
For Example
,
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,
right now Canada is inviting teenager from worldwide because no young
generation
is available if it is
continue
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continued
for another 10 years the revenue growth will back to 50 years
.
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.
On the other hand
, they have to take necessary steps Mainly, like to
encourge
contribute to the progress or growth of
encourage
kids in right
age
henceforth the balance will equal with retired persons and youth
then
automatically country to forward.
on
Suggestion
On
the top of that government should
encourge
contribute to the progress or growth of
encourage
encourages
encouraged
more kids in the
familly
a social unit living together
family
and same time they have to give benefits like child care and free educations.
Moreover some
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Moreover, some
days these states will
encourge
contribute to the progress or growth of
encourage
other
tettritory
a region marked off for administrative or other purposes
territory
people
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people, then
then
equality is same. In conclusion, revenue
fullfiled
completed to perfection
fulfilled
countries are facing
major
Suggestion
major issues
a major issue
issue
with no young
age
persons in
ther
of them or themselves
their
other
the
nations to
over come
win a victory over
overcome
this
they have to take some actions like
encourge
contribute to the progress or growth of
encourage
encouraged
many kids and invite young
generation
from other
provience
the territory occupied by one of the constituent administrative districts of a nation
provinces
province
therefore
these are going forward.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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