Parents and teachers make many rules for children to encourage good behaviour and protect them from danger. However, children would benefit from fewer rules and greater freedom. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the above statement?

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Children are like wet clay, they can be easily moulded.

Therefore

rules

Suggestion

the rules

are set by elders to guide their footsteps. Invariably, regulations should be implied to their little ones by parents to motivate good behaviour. Personally, I disagree to a large extent that fewer rules and more freedom will be beneficial. To embark on,

unware

(often followed by 'of') not aware

unaware

of the

jeopardies

pose a threat to; present a danger to

jeopardise

of the world these tiny tots get carried away by the fantasies of the world. The amount of

hokkum

a message that seems to convey no meaning

hokum

shown on TV outweighs the teachings of their elderly loved ones.

Settings

Suggestion

Setting

standards are a must for their safety even though we keep an eye on them.

Nevertheless

, continuous monitoring is impossible,

hence

there should be serious consequences for violating a rule.

For instance

, they like to emulate stunts performed by the characters in their TV shows which is highly dangerous. So, a repercussion faced earlier for disobeying can cease their plan of

such

an event.

Bizzarely

Suggestion

Bizarrely

, at all age groups, the peer pressure may lure them to an incorrect pathway. For the sake of parity, children can go to any extent as suggested by their friends. In

such

a scenario, the demarcations made play an important role to lead them correctly.

For example

, teenagers are easy prey for the drug or liquor dealers,

moreover

, they are easily approachable.

However

, if the

teen

an enclosed armored military vehicle; has a cannon and moves on caterpillar treads

tank

is well disciplined and not set free,

then

they will be able to handle any predicament. In a nutshell, people should be

making

Suggestion

made

strict rules for the small mouldable minds - children, to avoid any mishap until they reach adulthood and can take their own decisions.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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9Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

266 words

5.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Parents and teachers make many rules for children to encourage good behaviour and protect them from danger. However, children would benefit from fewer rules and greater freedom. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the above statement?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, manya are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how?

Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. Discussion both sides and give your opinion

Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.

People today do not feel safe either at home or when they are out. What do you think is the cause of this? What can be done to solve this problem?

‘Children who have brothers and sisters often have better social development than an only child. The government should therefore give money to parents to have two or more children.’ What do you think about this proposal?