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Finding job satisfaction is considered to be a luxury in many developing countries. Why do you think that is? Do you think job satisfaction is important?

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Scarcity of
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 in some underdeveloped nations is one of the most contentious issues these days and now considered a sign of nobility.
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consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
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 the argument that; the utmost reason is lack of resources, while
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 is essential for personal growth. On the one hand, the major cause of scantiness is fewer resources available for people. As developing countries have a limited number of projects and there is a huge backlog of
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 seekers, so they have to settle for what they have in hand. A
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briefly giving the gist of something
succinct
 example proclaiming
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, In Asian countries, statistics reveals that 66% of the population
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 jobless, and for every single vacancy large group of people applied.
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, in
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 a place in an organization is a daunting task and employers are looking for candidates who are willing to perform
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 duties that do not match with their profession and settle for low wages.
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,
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satisfaction
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 is the ultimate thing required to bring the best out of an employee. Because in terms of personal growth one must be happy and satisfied with his
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, so that they came up with innovative ideas,
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, work for the betterment of personal and company’s future perspective. For illustration, a person working in a department is dissatisfied with a
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; soon started to feel boredom and loses interest in their workplace.
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, many people settle on high salaries and choose
kind
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the kind
 of roles and responsibilities that do not bring
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.
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, they end up doing workplace chores, which does not ensure
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of them or themselves
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 bright future and render them from promoting on to higher levels. To conclude,
in-sufficiency
a lack of competence
insufficiency
 of
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 is a contentious issue in developing countries because of competition and opportunities available for people. While
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satisfaction
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 is essential for prosperity and long term stay in an organization.
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