Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages?

Since the social media has been
invented it
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invented, it
become a major platform for communication and people can keep themselves up to date with their
live
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lives
life
and about their families and friends lives as well. But many people believe that, positing your personal information has
potentials
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potential
risks.
However
, social media has its risks. As people of all ages have access to social media, children are more prone and can easily
exposed
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expose
to adult
content
and approached by strangers with unknown intentions
such
as
pedophiles
an adult who is sexually attracted to children
paedophiles
. Even if children are sure of who they are talking to, still it does not eliminate its dangers.
For instance
, cyber bullying, we heard about it in
news
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the news
frequently.
In addition
to
this
, parents feel that their children are home and away from their bullies and are in
safer
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the safe
the safest
environment, but still at some point they are still bullied by their bullies on social media which sometimes disturbs the children mentally so badly that they end up committing suicide.
Furthermore
, social media can be problematic for adults as well. Sometimes it affects their jobs as well, the way they are positing and sharing their information on social websites.
For example
, when they post about things which they don’t even do in their real lives. They can indirectly cause a bad impression on other people and as well as on their employers and if in case the employer judges the
content
you post on social media and he/she feels uncomfortable about the
content
might cost you your job or sometimes it is difficult to keep or attain your job if you present yourself as a different person on social media.
However
, if people are more aware while using and sharing their personal information on social media and only post respectful and respectable
content
,
then
definitely the advantages of social media outweighs the disadvantages.
Finally
, children and adults can easily be benefited from
such
technology.

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