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The best way to understand others culture is to work for a multinational organization. To what extent you agree or disagree?

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In
this
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 contemporary era, there are many multinational companies all around the world. Working with a multinational organization for an individual has become
easy and effective
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an easy and effective way
way
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 to learn the other cultures as well.
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, one of the active ways to be familiar with other
culture
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 is working with a company who has diverse
culture
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 employees, I would argue on
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 point, saying there is
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 other best
way
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 available to know multilingual people. There are numerous people who work for a worldwide firm. And get the opportunity to work under different cultural people around them. Yet there meet colleagues of different customs and
traditional
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traditions
tradition
, individuals have
merit
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the merit
 of interacting with each other and mingle with other
culture
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 too. In
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way
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, people
also
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 have
ability
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the ability
 to obtain once
culture
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 appropriately. But, it doesn’t mean
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 is the best
way
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 to understand
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
culture
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. In
this
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 paragraph, I want to show that there are many other people who get to know different
culture
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from
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of
 other ways.
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, it is not necessary for the person who works for a multicultural company, get to know the other
culture
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 in the perfect
way
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. Because, these days there are more opportunities for a mankind moving to aboard and working for the company. Where people get the better chance to know their
culture
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 well and interact with other individuals and know them much better than working as in multinational companies. In conclusion, even though people get to know
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
culture
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 working with a multinational
companies
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company
. Whereas, people
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 get benefited by means of knowing
different
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different cultures
culture
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 and multilingual languages working in other countries.
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