In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What are the reasons for this? What in your opinion can be done about it?

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Unemployment is on a rise, in
fact even
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fact, even
highly qualified graduates are finding it difficult to find jobs. There are several reasons behind
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unfortunate development. In my opinion, people should start sweating it out and be ready to do any job. The ongoing economic crisis is one of the main reasons for unemployment.
Recession
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The recession
has forced many organizations to stop hiring young graduates. As, a result many of the fresh graduates are not able to receive job offers. Even the existing employees are
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being laid
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off due to
the financial turmoil around the world. It should be noted that nation like US, England, Russia have long stopped growing. When the economy becomes stagnant, the need of new talent
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diminishes. At the same time, the numbers of people becoming graduates are increasing exponentially.
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is particularly true in developing nations. Due their increasing
economy many
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economy, many
people are able to afford
university education
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a university education
.
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, In India the numbers of people graduated in 2018 are much higher when compared to a decade ago. Unfortunately, In spite of their
economic growth many
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economic growth, many
graduates are still left without employment.
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, developed nations are looking at outsourcing of jobs to developing nations where cheap labour is available. In my opinion, young graduates should stop looking for jobs in fortune 500 companies and they should find jobs themselves. The internet has actually made it easier. It allows people to sell their products or services to parties interested all over the world.
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Also graduates
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Also, graduates
seeking employment should their obsession with White collar jobs. If they don’t mind sweating it out, jobs are available. To conclude, unemployment can be attributed to two main factors – the increase in the number of graduates and
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the economic crisis around the world. The only way to solve
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problem is to encourage people to find employment

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