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You have heard that your company is organising a language training abroad for a limited number of participants. Write a letter of interest state your position in the company explain why they should include you in the training Explain how training could benefit you and your company.

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Dear Sir I am writing
this
 letter to request you to consider my name for the German language training
course
 that you are organising in
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Berlin.
To begin
 with, I have been working as a Deputy manager in the Human Resource Department in your
company
 for three years.
Therefore
, I am in charge of 500 workers working in the
company
. But, more than 30% are from other countries out of
them
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 20% are from
the
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Germany as well. So, you can well know that why I am so imperative for
this
 training
course
.
Moreover
,
this
course
 would benefit me a lot. I would be able to interact with 100 and so from
the
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Germany. The communication gap with them, let to misunderstanding and has
in turn
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 hampered their work efficiency. After doing
this
course
, I would prove an asset to the
company
. Doing
this
course
 in Germany would
also
 help me to understand their culture and way of living. So that we could provide,
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 better work atmosphere for employees.
This
 will raise the productivity of our
company
. I am looking forward
for
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 your positive response in
this
 matter. Thanking you Yours faithfully Kiran
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