Children from 7-11 now spend more time watching television and playing video games than before. What are the effects of this on children, families and society? What are the possible solutions to this problem?

Stepping into the golden era,
unbelievely
not easy to believe
unbelievably
an outstanding achievements the new 21st century
also
witnessed the considerable change as due to
advancement
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the advancement
of technology all people have their own electronic devices including children. Technology
play
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plays
indispensable role in our daily life because it helps to provide the world news at the same
time
. Most of the children under the age 7 to 11 spend much
time
to watch
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watching
television
such
as movies, serials and playing video games on gadgets, computers and laptops. These
situation
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situations
create many problems to the society and families. In
this
essay I
will discussed
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will discuss
the valuable solutions how to solve
this
problem.
To begin
with, as every single rose comes with throne that means there are some problems which are created through new inventions
likewise
, in the past all
teen age
being of the age 13 through 19
teenage
went outside and play. The outdoor games like
walking running
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walking, running
and so on. But nowadays, the new generation
spend
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spends
a plethora of
time
to watching television. The main problem is that they sit only one place and many diseases generate.
Secondly
, teachers
not provide
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don't provide
aren't providing
the
home work
preparatory school work done outside school (especially at home)
homework
so the pupils cannot concentrate on studies.
Thirdly
, all the wards eat junk food,
lays
tell an untruth; pretend with intent to deceive
lies
, chips which make a lazy and illness body. It is a main reason to destroy the brain and
they
of them or themselves
their
easily lost their memory. Watching a lot of
screen
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screens
and playing video games
affect
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affects
the
children
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child's
children's
eyes. Both, parents busy
in
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with
job
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the job
and they cannot give
the more
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more time
the most time
time
to the babies.
However
, there are some possible solutions to tackle
this
problem. The guardian wants to encourage offsprings to go for
walk
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a walk
walks
and They
Also
motivate to play more outdoor games. In all schools
teachers
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teacher's
teachers'
responsibility to give the homework so that adolescence spent more
time
on education. All schools or institutions require to organise sports activities so that more and more teen-ager participated the games.
Moreover
,
government
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the government
wants to appoint a social worker in all cities
,
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,
so that they aware the children and families related to the health. Government needs to build more parks and gardens in every
cities
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city
or rural areas. So, all the juvenile or old Age people enjoy the fresh air.
It
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It's
also
helpful to refresh the mind. On the above confabulation, as every black clouds end with silver line. If teachers and parents
tells
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tell
the downside points than we can easily protect our children from the danger.
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