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Some businesses prohibit smoking in any of their offices. Some governments have banned smoking in all public places. Do you agree or disagree that this is the right course of action? Give reasons for your opinion

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. Most of the firms, organization and companies as well as governments impose restrictions to
smoke
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 in
work place
a place where work is done
workplaces
s and public amenities. It has become fashionable in the
world
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 today to blame smoking.
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,
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 I feel that smoking can be harmful, but I don’t think it should be forbidden completely. I would
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 argue that people should have the right whether or not they should
smoke
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. Allow me to present the three positive sides of smoking.
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, smoking certainly helps many people to relax. For some, it even improves concentration. If someone is upset owing to debt or they have
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an exam
exams
m, like to
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 to reduce the pressure or tension. Most of the people like to
smoke
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 when they are relaxing with friends.
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, governments throughout the
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 make huge profits from taxes on cigarettes. The income obtained through taxes provides funds which are used for building school, hospital and public places
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 as parks, gardens, sports ground and foot paths.
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, tobacco industry
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 employs tens of thousands of people all over the
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, particularly in poorer countries
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 as Zimbabwe or the Philippines. Without cigarettes, these people would have no jobs. Despite these positive effects there are lots of negative effects
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o smoking too.
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, smoking has been proven to be very dangerous for health. As one cigarette contains more than 4000 chemical substances,
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, it causes for many dangerous diseases
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 as heart attacks, asthma, bronchitis or lung cancer. According to a recent report in Britain close to 3,500 people are killed each year in road accidents and 120,000 are killed by smoking.
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, smoking costs governments millions of dollars because of the large number of people who need treatment in hospitals for smoking-related problems.
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, passive smoking is
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 a major concern today. Recent research shows that non-smokers can suffer from health problems if they spend long periods of time among people who do
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. In the UK children whose parents
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smoke are
smoke
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 are three times as likely to start smoking themselves _. In short, I think the
world
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 would be a better place without cigarettes.
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, the decision of whether _
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 or not to
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 should be for each individual to make. I suggest that people should not
smoke
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 in a room or a place where there are non smokers,
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 they should be free to
smoke
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 elsewhere.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondhand smoke
  • respiratory diseases
  • cardiovascular diseases
  • workplace productivity
  • illness-related absences
  • environmental pollution
  • discarded cigarette butts
  • economic considerations
  • healthcare costs
  • de-normalize tobacco use
  • smoke-free culture
  • initiation of smoking
  • duty of care
  • public health policy
  • healthier employees
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