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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic? What are the benefits and disadvantages of this?

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Tourism
 has acquired diverse dimensions over the years. Today, a large number of people are heading to places where conditions are pretty hostile. There are both advantages and disadvantages to
this
 trend and I will discuss both of them in
this
 essay. On the one hand, there are many advantages to visiting remote areas.
Firstly
,
tourism
 strengthens the economic conditions of
such
 places. With more tourists arriving in a country the economy of that country grows manifolds.
Secondly
,
tourism industry
Suggestion
the tourism industry
 is the main provider
o
connects a noun with the preceding word
of
) employment in
such
 areas where people cannot find any other means to earn a livelihood.
Thirdly
, to support
tourism
 many roads and hotels are built in remote areas. These facilities are
also
 used by locals and
hence
, they too are benefited.
On the other hand
,
this
 kind of
tourism
 has its disadvantages too.
Firstly
, local people find it difficult / challenging to share the already scarce natural resources with tourists.
For instance
, water is already scarce in the desert areas and with more tourists coming in the life becomes really hard for locals.
Secondly
, many places in the Antarctic and Himalayas are already under threat due to the influx of tourists. To conclude, in my opinion, the positive aspects of visiting dangerous places like
Sahara
Suggestion
the Sahara
 and Antarctica outweigh the negative aspects. What’s more, tourists can take certain measures to ensure that you are not causing much damage to these ecologically sensitive areas.
For example
, they can ensure that they do not litter around.

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