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Some people think women should be allowed to join the army, the navy and the air force just like men. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Since the dawn of the time, women have been playing a crucial role in the civilisation and development of mankind. It is clear that women can play a vital role in various defence forces so the writer of
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 statement thinks that they are a blessing for their country. To commence with, women will be a boon to the
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. To be clear, the world has realised that women are equally capable as men in both mentally and physically abilities. As women are blessed with intellectual and cognitive skills, they can use these invaluable skills in the
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, as we know, women are already serving in the various other physically demanding job sectors
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 as white collar and blue collar worker. It is unwise to select them in
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 job sector. More importantly, women are naturally less aggressive and peace makers and these qualities are blessing for the
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 and once they come to leadership these
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help
 to reduce conflict among the nations.
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, women are already part of the police department and they have proved that they are capable of doing adventures and riskier jobs. To cite an example, women leaders
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 as Queen Isabella, Victoria and the like
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to rule
 vast spectrum of power.
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, women have some physiological barriers in joining the defence
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. To make it clear, since women have to give birth to the child and nurture them, they need maternity leave for that. If women are in the
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, it would be impossible for them to get leave at the time of war. Apart from that, many retrogressive people argue that women's primary function is to prepare food and look after children and husband so they should not opt to go for a job. To conclude, in
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 advanced era, women have been working in every realm and they have proved that they can contribute a lot to the society so they should take in
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the defence force
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  • stamina
  • dynamics
  • cohesion
  • resilience
  • integration
  • gender disparities
  • morale
  • recruitment
  • retention
  • biological differences
  • stereotypes
  • feminism
  • glass ceiling
  • break barriers
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