Mothers play key roles in the upbringing of children. But in the recent times both parents are getting busy with professional life. Who in your opinion should take the responsibility of child care now?"

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There is no doubt that mothers play key role
to
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in
children
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children's
growth. There are many people who think nowadays both parents are busy with their professional life and do not have
time
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for
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to
focus on children. I will like to discuss who will take the responsibility of the child
care
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.
Firstly
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,
mother
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is very close to their kids and
kids
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the kids
learn all the things like behaviour, eating, discussions from
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mother
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the mother
.
For example
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,
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mother
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a mother
will help
to
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with
their kids in studies, how to behave with others. Father busy with earnings for family and will give what they want. If both are
working
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working, then
then
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kids addict with electronic gadgets and other things. If kids stayed with child
care
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center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
or day
care
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center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
, these people will guide just for
job
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the job
a job
. Here is the
mother
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role will play to take
care
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her kids.
Secondly
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,
father
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the father
will guide his or her studies and he will play with kids very limit
time
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. He will have
lot
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lots
of office
tensions
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tension
and other obligations, he cannot spend more
time
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with his kids.
For example
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, father will come late or very late during the day due to
office
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the office
and other activities. When he comes to
home
that male; objective male pronoun
him
, he might be tried and not spend more
time
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to take
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taking
care
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of his children. Same will
applicable
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apply
to
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mother
machine that converts other forms of energy into mechanical energy and so imparts motion
motor
if both are working. If
mother
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at home, she will take more responsibility to kids for each and every aspect. In the conclusion,
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mother role
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mother, role
is very crucial to
effect
have an effect upon
affect
their kids
then
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father. In my
openion
a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty
opinion
children need
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mother
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mothers
for
there
of them or themselves
their
guidence
something that provides direction or advice as to a decision or course of action
guidance
in every aspect.
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