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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation，such as an unsatisfactory job or lack of money . Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. discuss both view and give your own opinion

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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation
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such
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 as an unsatisfactory
job
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 or lack of money
.
Accept space
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 Others argue that it is better to try and improve
such
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 situations. In my opinion
,
Accept space
,
 we can choose both of the
way
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 solve the
problem
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 according to situations. Some people choose to accept the fact because it might be comfortable to keep it
。
Accept space
.
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Change always needs courage and struggling
.
Accept space
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Not everyone willing to face the challenge and take hard work. Based on my experience, I always get a C In PE at my college. I think the grade of C is enough because running is so scared for me. I am willing to do more math or physical test to improve my grade.
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 as that accept a bad situation is a better
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 for some people.
Another
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Other
 people argue that it is better to try and improve
such
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 situations. I think the
reason of those people
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reason those people
 is because they believe
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,
,
if people struggle for
improve
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improving
improved
 they tend to get a good result or achieve their goal for a long time
.
Accept space
.
 But if people just accept and don’t do anything
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,
,
the situation will become worse
.
Accept space
.
For example
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,
at the
first
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 of my career
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 I am unsatisfactory of my
job
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 and salary
.
Accept space
.
 I have taught myself a lot of data
analyzing
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analysing
. After 2 years
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,
,
I
successfully change
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have successfully changed
 my
job
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 and attend in the department of data. In conclusion
，
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,
 when we faced a bad situation
,
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,
we should learn to
analyze
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analyse
 the
problem
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 at
first
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. Sometimes we can accept and ignore some
problem
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 that is not important. Wisely
analyzing
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analysing
 is reasonable
way
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 to find a solution.Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation
，
Accept space
,
,
such
Linking Words
 as an unsatisfactory
job
Use synonyms
 or lack of money
.
Accept space
.
 Others argue that it is better to try and improve
such
Linking Words
 situations. In my opinion
,
Accept space
,
 we can choose both of the
way
Use synonyms
 solve the
problem
Use synonyms
 according to situations.

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