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There is a big influence of peer group on children's behaviour. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? What can be done about it?

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child
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’s behaviour is based on various social and cultural aspects of the environment where he or she belongs. Parents, teachers and
peer
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group
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 are some inevitable factors that could determine the behaviour of a
child
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. Among the above mentioned
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factors, peer
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factor factor peer
peer
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 could play a vital role to shape a
child
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’s overall character. There are both positive and negative influences and it solely depends on the kind of
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 one is associated with. The main benefits one could probably gain is the motivation and support from their friends at times of hardship or failure a
child
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 could face in their academics.
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, friends can become a better choice to share the problems they face in their private life at times when parents or teachers aren’t approachable.
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Also, if
 the
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group
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 of the
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 is more concentrated in academics and have a moral system that includes values like honesty, empathy, sincerity, punctuality and
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, it is obvious that the
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 will be reflecting those values and academic excellence in their life.
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Moreover, peer
Moreover peer
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 act as a platform for the kid to learn the basics of socialising, that could be a life changing skill in their future endeavours.
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 there are several advantages
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 the negatives can’t be ignored. There can be pressure from
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 groups to indulge in activities that could possibly affect the studies as well as health and well being of the
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. Activities like bunking of classes, alcohol and drug habits, exposure to explicit sexual and violent videos are some of the problems that could be related to
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the bad influence
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the peer group
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Hence, proper
 vigilance from parents and teachers plays a great role to monitor and guide the children
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, awareness and
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counselling
 of children would help them to overcome the unwanted pressure from the
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 as well as to improve their self confidence. To conclude
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 Despite the fact there are some cons which could be linked to
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 still we cannot overlook on these negatives as the benefits a
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 could reap out of
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 outrun its cons.

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