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Some people view giving presents as an important way to show care to family and friends, others think there are more important things that can be done to show care and love. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, exchange of gifts has become a trend among people of all ages. People always find a reason to give gifts- be it festivals, birthdays, anniversaries or other celebrations. While some people believe that giving presents to others is the best
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 to
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 and affection for them, others opine that there are many other ways to
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 that we
care
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. In my opinion, there are better ways than giving gifts to
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 our
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 for family and friends Most of the youngsters give luxurious gifts to friends to
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 their
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 for them. They believe that the more expensive the gift, the stronger the bond. Another reason that promotes
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 culture of gifting is that people are busy and feel guilty about it. They do not have much
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 to spend their family or friends.
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, they buy them gifts to overcome their sense of guilt. It is quite common for working parents to shower gifts on their children to compensate for their inability to spend quality
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 with them.
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, in my opinion, gifting is not the right or best
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 to
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 our affection. A gift is an object with a limited shelf life. It can never be the best expression of
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. Helping family and friends during their difficult
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 is the best
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 to
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 our
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 and concern for them because only those who truly
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 us stand by us in our difficult situations. I think no present is more precious than the gift of
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.
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, if any of your family member or friend is suffering from some health issues, spending
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 with them and offering them all the support we can
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 to
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 that we
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 for them. To conclude, in my perspective, it is very important to
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love
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 and
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 to our near and dear
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ones, but
 gifts are not the only
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 to express our feelings. There are other important ways to express it to others. Helping others in difficult times is the best
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 to express
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 and
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 rather than presenting them gifts on different occasions.
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