The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012

The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012
The bar chart shows the proportion of men and
women
who taught in seven different
faculties
of a particular university in 2012. There was a large gender disparity in some
faculties
: engineering was dominated by male
academics
whereas
education had the highest percentage of female
academics
. Notably, 85% of the engineering teachers were male and only 15% female.
Three quarters
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of the academic staff in education were
women
, with just 25% males.
However
, other
faculties
were more balanced in their composition. In medicine, gender representation was almost equal,
while
in arts subjects slightly more than half the
academics
were female (55%). It is interesting to note that business and science had the same proportions of men and
women
, with 65% male to 35% female
academics
in those
faculties
. Law had a slightly higher percentage of
women
at 40%.
Although
the
faculties
of engineering,
busines
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business
, science and law were still primarily
male- dominated
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male-dominated
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in 2012,
women
made up half the faculty of medicine and were predominated in education and arts.
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