In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family?

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Nowadays, in

Britain, as seniors age, they end up going to reside in nursing homes. These places cost money to provide nursing

care

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and I believe the

government

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should be responsible for the cost of the

care

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and not the family. In

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essay, I am going to give and explain my reasons why.

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of all, the

government

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has sufficient funds from different sources

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as income tax and tourism.

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, there is a certain percentage

that is

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deducted from each

individual’s

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individual

monthly pay by employers as per the country’s law.

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, seniors who have worked for many years in the past have contributed to the country’s economy by paying their share of income tax.

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, it is the

government

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’s obligation to offer

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care

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at no cost.

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, most people are working

fulltime

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full time

jobs to provide for their

families

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families, hence

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no time to provide

care

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for their aged parents and juggle work.

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is because a person working a 12-hour shift needs time to commute and rest after work. If a family member who works long hours decided to take

care

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of their elderly parents, he or she will end up getting burnout from all the work.

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, they can be less productive at their

job

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jobs

or even end up getting themselves fired. In conclusion, the availability of enough funds from the

government

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and insufficient time available to provide

care

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to seniors by family members indicates that the British

government

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should pay for the

care

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. I strongly support

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statement.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

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Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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Topic Vocabulary:

Aging population
Elderly care
Nursing homes
Social welfare
Intergenerational responsibility
Caregiving
Financial burden
Quality of life
Pension funds
Healthcare policy
Taxation
Subsidies
Private insurance
Long-term care
Sustainability

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In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family?

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