In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family?

Nowadays in
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Nowadays, in
Britain, as seniors age, they end up going to reside in nursing homes. These places cost money to provide nursing
care
and I believe the
government
should be responsible for the cost of the
care
and not the family. In
this
essay, I am going to give and explain my reasons why.
First
of all, the
government
has sufficient funds from different sources
such
as income tax and tourism.
For example
, there is a certain percentage
that is
deducted from each
individual’s
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individual
monthly pay by employers as per the country’s law.
Furthermore
, seniors who have worked for many years in the past have contributed to the country’s economy by paying their share of income tax.
Therefore
, it is the
government
’s obligation to offer
this
care
at no cost.
Secondly
, most people are working
fulltime
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full time
jobs to provide for their
families
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families, hence
hence
no time to provide
care
for their aged parents and juggle work.
This
is because a person working a 12-hour shift needs time to commute and rest after work. If a family member who works long hours decided to take
care
of their elderly parents, he or she will end up getting burnout from all the work.
As a result
, they can be less productive at their
job
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jobs
or even end up getting themselves fired. In conclusion, the availability of enough funds from the
government
and insufficient time available to provide
care
to seniors by family members indicates that the British
government
should pay for the
care
. I strongly support
this
statement.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aging population
  • Elderly care
  • Nursing homes
  • Social welfare
  • Intergenerational responsibility
  • Caregiving
  • Financial burden
  • Quality of life
  • Pension funds
  • Healthcare policy
  • Taxation
  • Subsidies
  • Private insurance
  • Long-term care
  • Sustainability
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