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Many university students live with their families, while others live away from home because their universities are in different places. What are the advantages and disadvantages both situations.

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These days, studying at university can be one of the best ways to guarantee a successful career. Some university students tend to live with their families while others are forced to live far away from
home
 in order to pursue their studies. There are both benefits and drawbacks of these situations
,
Accept space
,
 which will be analysed in
this
 essay. On the one hand, there are some reasons to believe that living at
home
 is advantageous. Nowadays our standards of living
is associated
Suggestion
are associated
 with spending becomes increasingly expensive,
instead
 of renting a flat or apartment, being at
home
 will save us a lot. So after graduation, young people can have a sum of money to stabilize their life. Even in the spiritual life these students are taken care much more than the
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
 who live far from
home
.
However
, the
home
 situation may
also
 have its disadvantages.
Family
Suggestion
Familiar
 routines are often disruptive for students who have to concentrate on their studies in a quiet
atmosphere it
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atmosphere, it
 is hard to keep up with a study schedule.
On the other hand
, when students live away from
home
, they have to confront challenges. One disadvantage is having to find accommodation. In conclusion,
although
 I can see both sides of staying with parents and living away
home
, I believe the latter delivers more benefits and less negatives to students.
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