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A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your locality. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your community. Do you support or oppose the factory establishment? Explain your position.

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To meet the demands of growing
population many
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population, many
 companies are establishing factories in and around cities to meet the growing needs. While these new factories provide job opportunities and open market for cost efficient goods, these establishments
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 release environmentally harmful gases polluting local environment.
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, I strongly oppose the decision of building the
factory
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 in the neighbourhood.
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The establishing
 of new production houses means new job opportunities to the locality which will in-turn
lead
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leads
 to
development
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the development
 of the town. As new people immigrate into the neighbourhood to work in the
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factory the
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factory in the city
city
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 will develop with new amenities coming up in the future to carter to their needs.
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, the south Indian
city
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, Hyderabad, had seen an immense development in the
last
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 decade after many software companies are established
at
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on
in
 the outskirts.
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, a new production house means increase manufactured goods which may result in the decrease of product cost.
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, one cannot turn a blind eye to the impending danger of the upcoming
factory
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. As the production starts there will be lots of
pollution which
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pollution, which
 will be emitted into the atmosphere polluting surrounding air and water,
thus
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 decreasing local environment. According to the recent statics, localities near factories have lesser clean air and environment. One good example is the
city
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 of
London which
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London, which
 is regarded as the least clean
city
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, polluted due to the surrounding factories.
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, with the danger of immense immigration cities tend to become crowded substantially decreasing the quality of life in the habitat. In a nutshell, it can be concluded that the dis-advantages of establishing the
factory
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 outweigh their advantages.
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, I strongly oppose the upcoming
factory
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • local economy
  • economic activity
  • employment opportunities
  • infrastructure
  • environmental impact
  • ecosystems
  • traffic congestion
  • property values
  • industrial aesthetic
  • rejuvenate
  • quality of life
  • pollution
  • wildlife habitats
  • suppliers
  • contractors
  • influx
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