PROPOSITION: Sending criminals to prison is not an effective method of dealing with them. Education and job training should be used instead. PROMPT: To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Crimes committed by an offender should be punished and is dealt with by the
law
. Some argue that sending criminals behind bars is not the best solution to punish them and suggest that they should be provided with
education
and
job
opportunities.
This
writer strongly disagrees with the claim because anyone who commits a
crime
should be punished
accordingly
. Sending
law
offenders
to
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in
the jail is not an effective method to punish criminals but
instead
they should be provided with proper
education
and
job
training.
This
is because of 3 main reasons.
Firstly
, most criminals are not educated. They are unaware of the consequences of their actions and the gravity of the
crime
committed. If
education
is provided, a
law
offender will not make a
crime
in the future anymore knowing the punishment he may face.
Secondly
, if a person commits a
crime
because of poverty,
job
trainings and livelihood programs of the government will be
this
person's gateway to refrain from breaking the
law
. To illustrate, thieves are pushed to the edge to steal when they are at their
most hungry
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hungriest
state.
Therefore
, if
job
opportunities
is
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are
at hand, he can earn money and will not steal again.
Thirdly
, sending criminals to school and offering
them jobs
Accept comma addition
them, jobs
will make them a better individual and will turn them into a
law
abiding citizens if they realized that the
law
and the society will still accept them no matter the situation they are in.
However
,
this
writer is strongly against the notion. Every
offenders
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offender
, may it be a small
crime
or a huge one, should be punished, unless the offender is a minor. They should be sent behind bars and serve their sentence. Educating them on the mistakes they committed do not undo the
crime
done nor
does offering
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offers
them jobs. These will only result to committing more wrongdoings since it seems that the
law
is in
favor
promote over another
favour
of criminals. If everyone is entitled to be educated and offered a
job
after committing a
crime
, everyone will be turned into criminals.
This
could result to chaos in the society because morality does not exist anymore.
However
, the government can
ammend
make amendments to
amend
amended
laws to let criminals learn and even provide them jobs while they are serving their sentence in the prison. There should be organizations who will teach inside the detention and
also
people who are adept to train detainees for livelihood programs. In
this
way, they can realize the gravity of their mistakes through serving jail time and at the same time they can
also
save money. To conclude, criminals
should be punish
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should be punished
should punish
accordingly
as mandated by the
law
.
However
, privileges
such
as giving
education
and
job
trainings can be
ggiven
acknowledged as a supposition
given
g given
provided that they will still serve their sentence in prison.

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