Some people believe that construction of new public buildings such as museums, town halls and sporting facilities is more important than renovation if the existing ones, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Infrastucture
Suggestion
Infrastructure
plays
big role
Suggestion
a big role
to
develope
make something new, such as a product or a mental or artistic creation
develop
individual city, for that government should take action to develop public buildings like library, museum, sports complex. If it is not updated nobody like to use those facilities.
Government
Suggestion
The government
should make new building for
updation
the act of changing something to bring it up to date (usually by adding something)
updating
or renovate the building. In
this
essay we will discuss both pros and cons for new and renovated building.
To begin
with public buildings like
library
Suggestion
the library
, sports complex, museum and town halls are
consider
Suggestion
considered
individual's leisure activity
Suggestion
an individual's leisure activity
. Most of the people use
this
kind of building for
entertain
Suggestion
entertaining
themself
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
. There no age
boundation
to use
facilities
Suggestion
the facilities
. It helps individual to gain knowledge and
exeperience
the accumulation of knowledge or skill that results from direct participation in events or activities
experience
experiences
.
For example
, I am using
library
Suggestion
the library
a library
to read books after I

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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