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Nowadays children spend more time playing computer games than doing sports. Why is it happening? Does it have a positive or negative effect on their development?

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Dear Mr Andrew, I am Alfred Ton, a member of the 'Trinity' music band, writing to express my grave concern about the letter we received from the
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 Friday. I am hoping that you would allow us to continue our practice at a convent time you feel suitable for a greater good. The letter simply stated that we no longer can practise in the
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 and better look for an alternative. The scenario is, in fact, complicated than that. As a young group of musicians, we patronise the
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 and often perform without any royalty. We primarily focus on music and lyrics that promote the peace, protest wars and inequity in the society. A large number of followers, mostly youths, are encouraged by our work and they follow us on social media. We believe in our
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 and all the members of our band are sworn to work for a greater cause, not for money or fame. We often attend
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 welfare programmes and do voluntary social works as a team. If we are barred from using the
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, we will soon find it hard to keep our dream alive as we are unable to hire an expensive location for practice. The purpose of the
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 is, in fact, to foster good works and support the
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 members, not to discourage them. I, on behalf of my team, would like you to reconsider the decision as we believe in your vision for a better society. We can use the
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when, according
 to my knowledge, no one uses it. Thanking you in advance. Yours faithfully, Alfred Ton

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