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The charts shows the amount and quality of water supplied to the regions of the world summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The charts shows the amount and quality of water supplied to the regions of the world summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The diagrams
illustrates
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 the quantity and level of cleanliness of
water
 delivered to the people of
Australia
 and
South east
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Southeast
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Asia
 in the year 1990 and 2010.
Overall
, it can be seen that the amount and quality of
water
 supplied to
Australia
was
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 more, in comparison to that of
Asia
 between the two time periods. It can be observed that 80% of people in
Australia
 were supplied with
water
 in 1990,
whereas
, only about 38% of
south east
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Asias
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Asian
 population
were
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given
water
, but in 2010,
this
 increased to almost 100% in
Australia
 and about 80% of persons being provided with
water
 in
Asia
.
Furthermore
, there was a slight increase in the level of purity of
water
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 being delivered to
Australia
 in 1990 from 70% to a little above 80% in 2010,
while
, the region of
south east
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south-east
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asia
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Asia
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 experienced a small decrease in
their
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 quality of
water
 between 1990 to 2010 from 40% to about 39%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, australia, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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