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The charts shows the amount and quality of water supplied to the regions of the world summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The charts shows the amount and quality of water supplied to the regions of the world summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The diagrams
illustrates
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 the quantity and level of cleanliness of
water
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 delivered to the people of
Australia
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 and
South east
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Southeast
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Asia
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 in the year 1990 and 2010.
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, it can be seen that the amount and quality of
water
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 supplied to
Australia
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was
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 more, in comparison to that of
Asia
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 between the two time periods. It can be observed that 80% of people in
Australia
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 were supplied with
water
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 in 1990,
whereas
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, only about 38% of
south east
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Asias
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Asian
 population
were
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given
water
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, but in 2010,
this
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 increased to almost 100% in
Australia
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 and about 80% of persons being provided with
water
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 in
Asia
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.
Furthermore
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, there was a slight increase in the level of purity of
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water
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 being delivered to
Australia
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 in 1990 from 70% to a little above 80% in 2010,
while
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, the region of
south east
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south-east
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asia
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Asia
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 experienced a small decrease in
their
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 quality of
water
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 between 1990 to 2010 from 40% to about 39%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, australia, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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