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considered an essential part of all cultures throughout the world. However, these days fewer and fewer people appreciate art and turn their focus to science, technology and business.

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Art
 has been around for several years. While people who understand and care for
art
 are decreasing in number, the amount of people gravitating towards
science
,
Accept space
,
technology
 are more.
This
 essay summarizes the reasons for shift in interest from
art
 towards other research based fields all around the globe
Art
 is historically considered a medium to express philosophical beliefs of people throughout the world. Paintings made by Vincent Van Gogh, Da Vinci
were
Suggestion
was
 way ahead of their own time. Their innovations were not lauded enough. Artists were
handsomly
in an attractively handsome manner
handsomely
 paid for their creations by the
art
 lovers. It takes years of perfection to produce a
master piece
the most outstanding work of a creative artist or craftsman
masterpiece
. It is a tough job to convey a message and attract audience all at the same time. Artist as a profession was
therefore
 considered one of the toughest. Innovations in
science
 did not have a bigger audience back
then
.
Accept space
.
 Now that internet is available to people are more involved in research and trade, even in remote areas. People can comprehend
importance
Suggestion
the importance
 of
science whereas
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science, whereas
 in the olden
days
Suggestion
day
 value of
art
 was greater than
science
. By using the advancements in
technology
 people can communicate and conduct business at a much quicker pace. All of
this
whilest
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whilst
 making money in a matter of seconds.
This
 has pivoted the
intrest
a sense of concern with and curiosity about someone or something
interest
interests
 of people towards
science
 and
technology
 from
art
. In conclusion, with abundant
resoruces
available source of wealth; a new or reserve supply that can be drawn upon when needed
resources
 at the their finger tips people are more focused than ever in
science
 and business fields
on the other hand
 it is difficult to acquire artistic skills. Since
art
 is a creative profession that needs time and patience to develop people prefer a much easier way to make a living which is through
technology
.

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