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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The information that had been displayed in the pie charts describes
about
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the
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water
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usage
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 for various purposes like industries,
agriculture
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 and domestic
use
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.
This
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 information is completely focused on six different countries and the
percent
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 that each area is accessed. Almost in every country
agriculture
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 was the major one in consuming
water
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 except
Europe
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 with
a
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 least
usage
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.But in
Europe
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 domestic
use
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 of
water
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 was nearly half of its agricultural
usage
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. On
a
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 whole Central
Asia
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 holds the first place in
the
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agriculture
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 for the intake of
water
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,
whereas
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 domestic
usage
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 in any country had not exceeded 20
percent
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.In terms of
water
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use
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 by
agriculture
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, the increasing order of the countries
are
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Europe
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,North
America
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,South
America
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,South East
Asia
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,Africa,
Central
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and Central
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Asia
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.
Europe
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,
North
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and North
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America
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 was the industrially largest
water
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 intakes others were using almost
same
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the same
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.Africa and South East
Asia
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 were two countries using
similarly
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 in every aspect. South
America
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 is doing average in all the sectors like
agriculture
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,industry,
domestic
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and domestic
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use
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.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, usage, agriculture, use, europe, asia, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • charts
  • percentage
  • water usage
  • agriculture
  • industrial use
  • domestic consumption
  • energy production
  • recreation
  • regions
  • sectors
  • overall
  • accounts for
  • ranging from
  • relatively low
  • in contrast
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • relevant
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