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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Othres value quality of work above appearance. Discusss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, there are some employers who think their employees should be presentable and they should put more consideration on their dressing. While, the rest still give more importance to the hard
work
 and dedication of workers towards
work
. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both the views and give my opinion at the end. To start with, organisations who give great significance to looks and are more concerned about how their workforce is looking for them an employees’s
first
 impression is the
last
. They opine from the sense of dressing of people working in their firm their standard will be judged among the other companies when they were going to meetings outside. Because they were the front face at that time.
Also
, they will have a great ambience within the organisation.
Moreover
, if working population is well dressed they too will feel more confident while they are presenting their companies.
Although
 the way they dress themselves is very impactful, but loyalty towards the working organisation is
also
 prominent. Because if they are not having the feeling of taking their workplace to the
next
 level or towards the path of success their appearance would not
work
. And
this
 feeling could only possible if they will
work
 hard.
Further
, they should
also
 learn the importance of time and try to complete the
work
 as soon as possible. Completion of
work
 in time will decide how much they are sincere in their
work
.
Last
 but not the least, they should
work
 in detail on each aspect of the project which is given to them. Because their negligence can put
thir
of them or themselves
their
 company success into risk. In crux, no doubt appearance is having great
role but
Accept comma addition
role, but
work
 should not be harmed in
this
. I believe, employees
first
 need to think of how their company can lead
then
 they would think
for
Suggestion
of
 their looks.
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