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When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration for many. Others, however, prefer different other aspects of a job over the salary they earn. Discuss both view and give opinion. In your opinion what are the most important aspects of a job?

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In
recent era
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the recent era
, good parks and high salaries perform a vital role in the satisfaction of employees.
most
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Most
 of the people select
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work
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a work organisation
a work Organisation
Organisation
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 in which they provide
considerable
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a considerable salary
salary
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.
while
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While
, others prefer a
job
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 which provide
good
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better
 facility and
positive
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a positive work environment
work
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 environment.
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 I am
also
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 among those who choose a
job
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with
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to
 provide
good amount
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a good amount
 of
salary
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.
focusing
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Focusing
 on the
first
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 few, people are working in the various
Organisation
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. All the employees
work
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 as a team and do
hard
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the hard work
work
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.
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, there is a boost in the economy of a company.
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work
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Work
organisation
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 provides good parks and
salary
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 to their employees and they get satisfied. The main purpose of
hard
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the hard work
work
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for
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of
 the
organisation
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 is for
job
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 satisfaction when employees get salaries they satisfied by doing
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job
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the job
a job
jobs
.
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,
salary
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also
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for
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to
 perform a pivotal role in every person's life. With the help of good income that can survive in the society.
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Also they
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Also, they
 can buy daily need and spend money for their study.
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Salary
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The salary
 is very important in any emergency situation like
medical emergency
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a medical emergency
medical emergencies
. So,
salary
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 is the most considerable in choosing a
job
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.
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, most of people do
job
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 for particular interest. For example, NGO, it is a run by a group of people. They are just helping people who need actual help. They do not take any promotion and
salary
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from
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for
this
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 type of
organisation
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. They
are worked
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are working
have worked
work
 for the needy people and make capable them to survive in the society.
people
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People
 who are working in
this
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 type of
organisation
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 get only a
job
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 satisfaction from sharing happiness to people.
Hence
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, people only focus on the
work
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 environment rather than focusing on
salary
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. In conclusion, if people have to survive in
this
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 materialistic world they need some amount of money which is
receive
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received
 from the
organisation
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.
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salary
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Salary
 is must need for the person to buy daily needs
.
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.
Also
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 help other family members to buy some product for themselves.

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