Some people think that prison sentences should not be used in dealing with criminals. Education and job training should be used instead. To what extent do you agree on disagree ?

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Nowadays, the
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rate is increasing rapidly, in HCM City
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quota is nearly 40%, it is not an acceptable rate for a city to visit or have a trip alone for a foreigner or even the citizen live here. Because of that, the government provides a lot of punishment for criminals, one of them is penitentiary sentences. In my opinion, we must use the Education,
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training and
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sentences with acceptable felony, not only use Education, appointment training or
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sentences. Dealing with some big criminal
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as a killer, murderer, bomber, etc. Or some
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with high danger level, those people are too dangerous for using the normal punishment, we should use some acceptable punishment with a high degree for them like
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sentences to protect the people and prevent them committing the
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again. And with some normal cases of
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(street fighting, pocket picker, thief, etc.) I think we should punish them by the money and get them to some education and
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training centre to help them realise the good side and bad side and they can learn some skill or any particular
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to help them can have a
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and made the money. But in some developed countries, their
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system
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has the education and
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training program for criminals while they are in jail. Almost all the crimes start with the reason is they don’t have a
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or they don’t have enough abilities and skills to do something about making money, so, in
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case - in those countries,
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sentences can be the suitable way to help the criminals far away their crimes.
Prison
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sentences or education,
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training just only some way to remove the
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rate for those who had committed the
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, to solve the original problem, we should apply some better solutions for the young generation, to help them have a right thought, stay away from the
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and help them have enough skill and knowledge to can have a
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in the future.

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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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