it has been said that the world is becoming a global village in which there are no boundaries to trade and communication. Do the benefits of globalization outweigh the drawbacks?

Some people say that there are no limits to globalisation in terms of trade and communication, but that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. While I support
this
view, I think it is important to acknowledge that there is a downside to
globalisation
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globalise
. One downside is in terms of businesses. Big international firms can move to countries where labour and land for factories is cheap, and may exploit workers.
For example
, Benetton, a fashion company, was recently criticized for running sweatshops in
Asia while
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Asia, while
selling expensive branded products in wealthy areas. When
such
a company withdraws to move to
somewhere even
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somewhere, even
cheaper, it can result in job losses and because no other industry has been developed, the economy can fail.
For example
, Coca Cola shit its bottling plant in Singapore and moved to Malaysia. Over 200 unskilled workers lost their job and with little other manufacturing work available, became unemployed.
On the other hand
, business is becoming increasingly international. Even small traders and hobby e-commerce enthusiasts can buy and sell across the globe on sites like E-bay and Amazon.
Such
competition leads to increasing quality, choice, safety standards and better prices, which
all benefit consumers
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benefit all consumers
.
Ultimately good
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companies will continue to expand and employ more people. As business and communications spread around the world, poorer countries can take advantage of new technologies, taxes from investment in land, people and factories, and ultimately, it can raise the income of the world’s poorest countries. According to the UN, global trade has triggered strong growth in developing countries from 29% in 1995 to 37% in 2005 and 42% by 2015. In short, while there will always be some drawbacks to change as broad and far reaching as globalisation, I believe that there are more positive aspects tha
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es ones, particularly for the poorest countries in the world’s marketplace
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • global village
  • boundaries
  • trade
  • communication
  • benefits
  • drawbacks
  • economic
  • improved
  • connectivity
  • cultural exchange
  • diversity
  • access
  • markets
  • technology
  • competition
  • innovation
  • negative impacts
  • income inequality
  • cultural identity
  • environmental degradation
  • exploitation
  • workers
  • developing countries
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