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Climate change is a big environmental problem that has become critical in last couple of decades. Some people claim that humans should stop burning fossil fuels and use only alternative energy resources, such as wind and solar power. Others say that oil, gas and coal are essential for many industries, and not using them will lead to economic collapse. What is your opinion? Support your point of view with relevant examples.

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Fossil
fuel
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 has a significant role in the economy and the geopolitics of our world today.
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, many argue that modern societies cannot abandon coal, petrol and gas as
energy
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 sources.
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, I believe that fossil
fuel
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 should no longer be utilised as a source of
power
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 due to its damaging effect on the environment and the
climate
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. Recent scientific research has proved the connection between the current
climate
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 crisis and the excessive utilisation of fossil
fuel
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. Burning of fossil
fuel
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 to generate
power
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 releases carbon dioxide and other greenhouse gases into the atmosphere. Which in turn trap heat and increase the temperature on our planet, causing global warming and
climate
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 change.
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, in recent years, summer has become hotter than they used to be. In fact, the temperature in Europe reached an unprecedented level
last
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 summer.
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, extreme weather has become more frequent than ever before, with rainfall causing flooding and hurricanes in many regions in the world.
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, a recent flood in India killed more than 100 people and destroyed hundreds of homes. Today, there is no doubt about the association between the burning of fossil
fuel
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 and
climate
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 crisis.
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, mining and drilling of fossil
fuel
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 should stop and more sustainable sources of
power
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 should be adopted.
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, the argument that ending oil and gas utilisation would collapse the oil industry and harm the economy is not really accurate. Moving to clean and renewable
energy
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 as solar and wind
energy
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 will create a new industry and encourage the development of new technologies. Adaptation of sustainable
energy
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 shouldn’t be sudden, but gradual to allow for the development of new industries.
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 can be proved already by many countries that have succeeded in eliminating a large percentage of fossil
fuel
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 usage and implemented renewable technologies.
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, Germany generates 60% of its electricity from solar
power
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.
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, Scotland uses wind turbines to provide electricity to most of its residents. Adopting sustainable
energy
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 will enhance the economy rather than destroy it. To conclude, I truly believe that the world should move away from fossil
fuel
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, due to its harmful effect on the environment and its detrimental impact on the
climate
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • mitigate
  • renewable energy sources
  • economic collapse
  • fossil fuels
  • solar power
  • wind energy
  • alternative resources
  • clean energy
  • technological advancements
  • government subsidies
  • energy transition
  • reliability
  • job creation
  • economic benefits
  • global warming
  • carbon footprint
  • sustainability
  • innovation
  • infrastructure
  • regulatory framework
  • energy efficiency
  • climate resilience
  • decarbonization
  • socioeconomic impact
  • energy security
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