The crime rate among teenagers has increased dramatically in many countries. Discuss some possible reasons for this increase and suggest solutions.

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Nowadays the levels of crimes in young generation
has increased
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have increased
dramatically in many countries. In
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essay I will discuss some of the biggest reasons associated with development the crime rate in teenagers. On the one hand, one of the most significant reasons of increased crimes is
divorce rate
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the divorce rate
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among
parents.
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, no one doubt in these families usually their kids faced with lack of giving attention.
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, poverty and crimes have a direct link and dire consequences
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as, drug-related crime. Undeniably
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lack of community -service in many
neighborhoods
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhoods
. Recent research it has shown that in
UK
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the UK
when their children with their bad
friends spending
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friends, spending
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they
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dominated by their habit after several days they have a same habit and activity.
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, the best way to tackle
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problem is providing education by
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the government
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The government
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make
parents aware to spending more
time
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with their children
.
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. Giving a more attention
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to
their kids. If parent spending more
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to going outside with their children it can lead to reduce crime levels.
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, draconian punishment
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can
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solve
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problem. It is likely even might be which result in parent try to have good
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
so they are
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prevented
their criminal act. In conclusion, today criminal statistics among young generation increased dramatically due to poverty and getting
divorce
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divorce, however
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with providing education and spending more
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with adolescent can
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solving
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solve
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problem and reduce the levels of crimes between younker.
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