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Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree? Provide relevant if necessary. Write atleast 250words

#salary #job #satisfaction #atleast
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As a reward
of
Suggestion
for
 hard working, getting a well-paid salary may provide a great sense of achievement.
However
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, from my perspective,
job
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 contentment is more significant than big amount earning. The following essay will discuss about the
improtance
the quality of being important and worthy of note
importance
 of
job
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contantment
happiness with one's situation in life
contentment
.
To begin
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 with, big salary would not big enough forever.
Such
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 as for me $200/
hour maybe suppose
Suggestion
hour, maybe supposes
hour maybe supposes
 to be a big salary for now, but it would not be "big" for 3 years later. When the
amout
a quantity of money
amount
 of earning not
attrative
pleasing to the eye or mind especially through beauty or charm
attractive
 anymore, workers would lose the interest of work for the feeling of
meaningless
Suggestion
meaninglessness
.
As a result
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, the satisfaction from big payment would not be
meantain
kept in good condition
maintained
maintain
mentioned
 for a long time for everyone. When the payment of the
job
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not fit
Suggestion
doesn't fit
expetion
the feelings expressed on a person's face
expression
exception
 anymore, work on task will need extra motivation for
made
Suggestion
making
effort
Suggestion
the effort
an effort
.
In contrast
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, satisfy from making effort on works is another story. Try one's best not
to
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
 overwhelmed by mistakes and stumbled by shortage, as well as always learn from failures could be a long journey.
Furthermore
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, even the same
job
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 of the same position,
skillfully
with skill
skilfully
 strategically efficiently working need daily self training and endless sharpening.
For instance
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, none can work without making
mistake
Suggestion
mistakes
, but everyone can make
dicision
the act of making up your mind about something
decisions
decision
 on how to face that. Someone may choose to ignore it, for its unavoidable. Someone may choose to face it, and learn from it, which can be better for
next
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 time. And getting better and better would provide the sense of achievement.
Thus
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job
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 satisfaction could be the meaning of hard working. In
conclution
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
conclusions
, compare to
a mount
a quantity of money
amount
 of money as
reward
Suggestion
a reward
rewards
, the sense of
fullfillment
a feeling of satisfaction at having achieved your desires
fulfilment
 of
job
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 is more worthy.

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