some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programme (for example working for a charity , improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children).

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novel
noble
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.Many
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organisations
like NGO's
work
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for the poor people and provide them
better quality
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a better quality
of
life
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. But some people believe that unpaid community services
starts
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start
from younger age by making part of high school
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a series of steps to be carried out or goals to be accomplished
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the study
. In my country
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there is
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the major population
a major population
of youth
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,
which lead to greater human resources. There are one-fourth population is
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below
poverty
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They do not have proper food
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,
clothes, fresh drinking water and shelter. They live their
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under
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the dark
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for a charity
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it will be a great help for these poor people. In schools
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as a sports trainer to teach younger and untrained children without any cost. By doing
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,
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will sharpen
their skills as well as gain different
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. In their home town
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,
they can try to improve the neighbourhood around them. As we
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,
in todays world no one cares about their neighbour
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. These types of programmes should be made compulsory in high schools to produce social scholars
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in
the nation
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As we know, students will be the future of any nation
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the statement
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should be
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produced by a manufacturing process
made
compulsory in high school programmes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • altruism
  • social responsibility
  • cultivate
  • mandatory
  • detract
  • academic pursuits
  • forced labor
  • ineffective efforts
  • voluntary participation
  • autonomy
  • impactful engagement
  • bridge social divides
  • fostering understanding
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