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some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programme (for example working for a charity , improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children).

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It is true that helping the needy one is great
nobel
an extended fictional work in prose; usually in the form of a story
novel
noble
mobile
work
.Many
organisation
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organisations
 like NGO's
work
 for the poor people and provide them
better quality
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a better quality
 of
life
. But some people believe that unpaid community services
starts
Suggestion
start
 from younger age by making part of high school
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a series of steps to be carried out or goals to be accomplished
programs
. It will indeed be a good move that students can
also
 participate in these types of services while studying. It will benefit students to become aware about social
work
 and
also
 do some different
work
 apart from
study
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the study
. In my country
,
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,
 there is
major population
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the major population
a major population
 of youth
,
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,
 which lead to greater human resources. There are one-fourth population is
under
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below
 poverty
.
Accept space
.
They do not have proper food
,
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,
 clothes, fresh drinking water and shelter. They live their
life
 under
dark
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the dark
.
Accept space
.
 If students
work
 for a charity
,
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,
then
 it will be a great help for these poor people. In schools
,
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,
 they can
work
 as a sports trainer to teach younger and untrained children without any cost. By doing
this
,
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,
 they
will sharpens
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will sharpen
 their skills as well as gain different
experinces
the accumulation of knowledge or skill that results from direct participation in events or activities
experiences
experience
 as a trainer.
which
Suggestion
Which
 works for them in
further
life
. In their home town
,
Accept space
,
 they can try to improve the neighbourhood around them. As we
konw
be cognizant or aware of a fact or a specific piece of information; possess knowledge or information about
know
knew
,
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,
 in todays world no one cares about their neighbour
beacause
for the reason that; on account of
because
 all of us are busy in their
life
. These types of programmes should be made compulsory in high schools to produce social scholars
to
Suggestion
in
 the nation
.
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.
 As we know, students will be the future of any nation
that is
 why we have to make our
scholars
an educational institution
schools
 better. To conclude
,
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 completely agree with
statement
Suggestion
the statement
 that these types of social
work
 should be
mae
produced by a manufacturing process
made
 compulsory in high school programmes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • altruism
  • social responsibility
  • cultivate
  • mandatory
  • detract
  • academic pursuits
  • forced labor
  • ineffective efforts
  • voluntary participation
  • autonomy
  • impactful engagement
  • bridge social divides
  • fostering understanding
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