Some people say that a gap year between school and university is good idea ,while others disagree. Discuss both views and give opinion.

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between their secondary and tertiary schooling.

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has a plethora of benefits, according to my mind, the disadvantages are more significant than advantageous.

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Some people say that a gap year between school and university is good idea ,while others disagree. Discuss both views and give opinion.

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In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both sides and express your opinion.

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In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. What are your opinion on this?