Some people say that a gap year between school and university is good idea ,while others disagree. Discuss both views and give opinion.

The popularity of
gap
year
has risen
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rose
significantly especially
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significantly, especially
during
last decade
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the last decade
, so is the controversy related to
this
. As the benefits of taking
an
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a
year
off are hard to quantify, it is considered to be unnecessary but
opposers
recommend
this
highly. Both these will be
analyzed
examined carefully and methodically; broken down for consideration of constituent parts
analysed
prior reaching
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prior to reaching
a relevant verdict. Taking a
gap
year
is
boon
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a boon
for students because with
this
, they have
an
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a
year
long break from their monotonous study schedule. After
this
gap
,
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,
they can choose the subject very carefully and easily
,
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,
which they have immense interest in.
Moreover
, they
,
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,
not only, can learn more interpersonal skills like time management, self dependence and so on, but
also
they can increase their
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
and thinking experience. They can gain knowledge about
nature
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the nature
of different persons
,
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,
any other nation's culture
,
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,
any place and many other fields during travelling.
For instance
, a survey carried out by BBC
,
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,
England shows that 40% learners are more successful in their own life, who took a
year
gap
between their secondary and tertiary schooling.
However
, some people think that a
gap
year
during
study
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the study
is a method of wastage of student's previous time and money. They can spend their time and money on their
further
studies. When they spend Abigail chunk of money on travelling, they would face
extra financial burden
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the extra financial burden
during their tertiary education.
Also their
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Also, their
concentration deviates towards amusement and they cannot pay attention towards their studies.
Last
but not the least, during travelling,
safety issue
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the safety issue
is
matter
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a matter
of grave concern. Given the above mentioned information, it can be concluded that
although
taking a
gap
year
has a plethora of benefits, according to my mind, the disadvantages are more significant than advantageous.

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