Some people believe that women should play an equal role as men in a country's police force or military forces, Such as the army, while others think women are not suitable for these kinds of jobs. What is you opinion ?

When discussing the issue of female's
serveice
work done by one person or group that benefits another
service
serves
in the military or police forces, one should bear in mind the complexity of the issue. While some people believe there are no differences between the sexes, and both should be allowed to protect our country equally, others think that women are not adequate as men and should not take an active part in protecting our country. In my opinion, females are not suitable as men, and should not take a part in these professions. In the following essay, I will provide examples and argument to support my position. One argument in favour of my opinion, is that the
phsychological
mental or emotional as opposed to physical in nature
psychological
consequences of seeing an injured female in the
battle field
a region where a battle is being (or has been) fought
battlefield
are much greater. As a consequence,
this
influence the ability of the soldiers on the ground during battle.
For example
, during the Israeli
Independace
a city in western Missouri; the beginning of the Santa Fe Trail
Independence
War, both sexes
faught
be engaged in a fight; carry on a fight
fought
fight
together side by side. An internal
questionnair
a form containing a set of questions; submitted to people to gain statistical information
questionnaire
questionnaires
done within the Israeli military after the war ended, found that 40% of the fighters reported that seeing a dead girl had a bad influence on their function and judgement during the war.
This
example shows, that there are negative
phsychological
mental or emotional as opposed to physical in nature
psychological
effects when women are incorporated into a fighting position. Another view to support my assumption, is that women are much more
volnerable
susceptible to attack
vulnerable
to physical activity related injuries, as opposed to men. To
ilustrate
clarify by giving an example of
illustrate
, A recent study performed by the Israeli
Deffence
Suggestion
Defence
Forces 5 years ago, trained both sexes to become active foot soldiers over a 1 year period. Due to the high physical demand, more
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
30% of the girls suffered stress and knee injuries, as opposed to 8% only among males.
This
example
emphesize
to stress, single out as important
emphasizes
emphasises
, that the physical ability of males and females are not similar, and females are prone to physical stress
realated
being connected either logically or causally or by shared characteristics
related
disablities
the condition of being unable to perform as a consequence of physical or mental unfitness
disabilities
that can influence their function as a fighter or a police officer. In conclusion, I maintain that females are not able to perform
similarly
as men in the army and other
deffensive
Suggestion
defence
defensive
forces. These professions should be kept for men who can endure the physical strains associated with the position.
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