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Many people believe that in order to have clean and tidy streets in their neighbourhood, this should be the residents’ responsibility, while others think it should be the government’s duty. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Most individuals belong to the school of thought that, in order to ensure cleanliness and tidiness in their
environment
, it’s the responsibility of the inhabitant, others,
however
, believe it is a
government
 responsibility. In my opinion, I believe
government
 should be responsible for the tidiness as
this
 will create employment opportunity and
also
 improve the economy of the country. On the one hand, some people think that
government
 should be responsible and I agree as
this
 will create more jobs for the citizens and by so doing it will increase their earning power.
Furthermore
, it will
also
 boost the economy of the country as
government
 will charge taxes based on the income of its workers, which in return can be used in the
infrastructural
 development of the nation
On the other hand
, some are
also
opine
Suggestion
opinions
 that individuals should be able to cater for the cleanliness of their immediate
environment
 because residents feels the consequences more if they fail to clean their
environment
, as it opens the inhabitants to a huge health hazard.
For Instance
, World Health organization (WHO) statistics in 2017 reported that most families suffering from Cholera and typhoid fever and a host of other ailments are due to the uncleanliness in their immediate
environment
 and it can
also
leads
Suggestion
lead
 to death if it's not quickly and effectively managed. In conclusion, while people may vary in their opinion, I believe that it’s the governing body responsibility to adhere to the maintenance and tidiness of the streets, as
this
 will help reduce unemployment rate in the society and
also
 boost the nation’s per-capital income.
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