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In some countries in Europe, some children from the age of 11 or 13 go to schools to learn more practical skills that will help them get a job. Other children stay in schools which provide a more general academic education. What should schools do to prepare students for the world of work? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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While, in some part of the world, high school students prefer to develop practical knowledge and others take the regular classes to learn the basic general knowledge. In my opinion, schools ought to teach them general subjects rather than practical skills that would be appropriate to their age. On the one hand, students in
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
 region, within the age of 11 to 13, who opt to go for general academics rather than practical, will have
better future
Suggestion
a better future
, which I agree.
In other words
, by covering all the main subjects in their pre secondary period,
pupil
Suggestion
pupils
a pupil
the pupil
 will have an overall understanding rather than a particular skill.
For example
, various subjects like English, mathematics, and other regional languages cannot be avoided in the early stage of education because it gives
base
Suggestion
a base
 to acquire
further level
Suggestion
a further level
further levels
 of knowledge, especially practical skills which are required for any job.
On the other hand
, students have a strong thought that by choosing practice oriented curriculum will help them to get a job easily in the future. In my view,
this
 misconception should be corrected by teachers because it is not going to benefit them in their professional career.
In other words
, in order to use the practical skills, the must understand the basics from the root level.
Moreover
, learning vocational syllabus will be more effective if it is taught in the higher secondary schools or at the degree level of education. In conclusion, despite practice based educational system, schools should provide basic lessons which will be help them to acquire other levels of education in the coming stages of their student life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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