Some people think children’s spending time on TV, video and PC games is good, while others think it is bad. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In my
piont
a geometric element that has position but no extension
point
of view, video gaming, tv or computer games is not good. Kids waste their time and energy on watching them or playing them. Children must learn something which would be helpful for their future. Children must do
such
activities which enhance their mind capabilities to do big projects in life. If they only watch tv and play games, they
wont
will not
won't
be able to do anything useful in their future. By doing
this
, their physical health will
also
effected. But by playing some games like cricket, hockey or tennis they will be
phycically
in accord with physical laws
physically
fit. They would have
healthy life
Suggestion
a healthy life
healthy lives
in their future. Overall, video gaming or tv should be banned in early childhood. Children should have a habit to learn something new daily.
This
will leave a positive effect on their health and life.

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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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