The position of women in society has changed markedly in the last twenty years. many of the problems young people now experience, such as juvenile delinquency, arise from the fact that many married women now work and are not at home to care for their children.

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modern era, women have created her own position and image in the society by doing the equivalent or more
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than men and got the same respect as a man gets from the society. Now, women often
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outside their homes as compared to the past. But,
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trend creates problems for their children.
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with, when the mothers are not at home, children face a number of problems like feeling loneliness, doing the
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without the proper guidance, involvement in criminal acts and problem related to their schools and friends etc. In fact, without adult supervision they feel independent at a young age and willing to do anything. Because they know that no one is at home to teach them right and wrong.
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, they are in the phase of adolescence, in
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age they feel right about any bad thing, in their life and lead to juvenile delinquency.
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, juvenile delinquency mostly happens among adolescents because these people are neither kids nor they are adults. Specially they have a lack of experience and knowledge about their mental, physical, social development and about society. As they are not able to understand the intentions of different people they easily get hijacked by the bad people's mentality.
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makes it impossible for them to choose right or wrong and
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feel pressure to do bad things.
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but not the least, most of the crimes in the world are committed by the teenagers and the crime rate done by
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group is increasing day by day. In my opinion,
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, they are not getting proper guidance from their parents as they go out for
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,
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, they are
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getting influenced by other factors
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as friends and act of famous stars in order to get attention of people. In conclusion, it is not necessary that, children whose mothers don't have time to be at home to supervise them, participate in the criminal act. Parents should have to make friendly relation with the children and should always support them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • evolution
  • domestic roles
  • diverse professional engagements
  • dual-working parents
  • family dynamics
  • juvenile delinquency
  • societal and economic factors
  • dual-income households
  • childcare methods
  • community support systems
  • gender roles
  • family responsibilities
  • professional aspirations
  • development needs
  • correlation
  • simplistic causation
  • workplace policies
  • flexible hours
  • parental leave
  • gender equality
  • role models
  • successful womanhood
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