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Some people think the media like television and films has an affect on people's behaviour in a negative way.

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Now-a-days some people think the media like television and films has an
affect
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
effect
 on people's
behaviour
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 in a negative way.
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hand some
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hand, some
 people
does not bother it all
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do not bother with it all
do not bother it all
. In my opinion, the media has a vital role to play. It can make a negative
impact
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 as well as positive
impact
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 on a social life especially on people's attitude. Media can easily change the way of thinking.
In
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During
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 time, social media can easily deviate the mind
ser
put into a certain place or abstract location
set
user
share
 of people. The knowledge disseminated by a vivid picture on a television or in a film is easier for the people of any age to imbibe. If it can make a positive
impact
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 to the
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society
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society, then
then
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 it would be always welcomed. Government has to impose strict rules in order to restrict the false propagandas spreading through the media.
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 things can make a positive
impact
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 on the
society
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 as well as in the
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 of the people. There are several organizations who are making use of media in a positive way. They even seek for the aid to the family of person through the media and by watching it many people come forward with financial help. Recently there are lots of incidents happened in some part is our country. Most of them are crime related. Upon the investigation it's been revealed that the culprits got the inspiration to in the crime by watching some films. The
impact
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 of the films in some one's
behaviour
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 is really terrifying. It is not advisable to completely put blame on
media but
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media, but
 still it has done
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 part. The fake news spreading through the social media
also
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 made so many negative impacts on our
society
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. It can easily change the opinion of the
people which
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people, which
 can lead them to take incorrect actions. The news channel is
also
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 playing their part well. They are now funded by many political groups and are not ashamed to broadcast fake news which are detrimental to the
society
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 and which can easily change the
behaviour
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 of the political bias people which can
leas
take somebody somewhere
lead
 to the political crime. To summarise, if the media coverage and broadcasting is strictly censored
then
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 it can not mislead our
society
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 and
as a result
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behaviour
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 of the people
also
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 not get affected. Government authorities and the media person should not run away from their onus. They can certainly develop a good character in the people of our
society
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.
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