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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now one big traffic jam How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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Automobile owners have developed very fast under the past thirty years that many urbanization in the earth
are
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is
 nowadays one huge
traffic
 jam. İn my
opinion it's
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opinion, it's
 obviously an enormous
problems
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problem
 in
last years
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the last years
. On the one hand, in
last thirty years
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the last thirty years
 the
traffic
 problems
is
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are
 highly improved and in solving the transportation problems role of government is most important.
Government
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The government
 could
decreasing
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decrease
 the amount of cars, which are documentary years are inspired. Every
owners
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owner
have
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has
 to renew their cars about 10 years. İn
this
 case should be
number
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the number
a number
 of existing
car
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cars
 in cities would be
decrease
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decreased
 and
this
 solution could be beneficial of
traffic
 jam. Another example, government
might be increase
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might increase
 the tax of
car
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the car
cars
twice which
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twice, which
 is consists
in
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of
 the cities.
Although
 during spending much money of
owners
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the owners
 could be they are unable to pay huge tax of cars. At the end,
in
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 could be one kind of problem
to
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of
human body
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the human body
 to use another idea to escape
this
 decision.
On the other hand
,
ministry
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the ministry
 should
upgrading
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upgrade
 the underway rails of metropolitan or to much less pay for tickets,
also
 to import many buses and etc.
For instance
, after unable paying
to
being one more than one
two
 taxes, people automatically use the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 transports which are so profitable to arrive to the place which they needed. İn conclusion, the best way to solve the
traffic
 jams is government pressures or decides which they are simple and benefit to
urbans
relating to or concerned with a city or densely populated area
urban
 problems.
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