In some countries, university students live at home with their families while they study in the same city, whereas, in other countries they live away from home while they study. Do the benefits of living away from home outweigh the disadvantages?
Currently, with mounting competition in
education
some university undergraduates live away from home during their study. It is agreed that the advantage of Add a comma
education,
this
outweighs the disadvantage. Linking Words
This
essay provides some considerable empirical Linking Words
evidences
to support the statement.
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evidence
pieces of evidence
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To begin
with, it is noted that living away from the family during higher studies provides numerous benefits. To commence Linking Words
with
one of the most paramount advantagesChange preposition
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,
is the independence they enjoy Remove the comma
apply
while
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parents
are away, which Correct pronoun usage
their parents
also
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teach
them valuable things in its own interesting way. To enumerate, the Correct subject-verb agreement
teaches
students
learn basic Use synonyms
life
skills Use synonyms
such
as time management and management of finances, which are the major abilities needed by a person. Linking Words
For example
, in a recent survey conducted by the UK government, most of the respondents Linking Words
have
favourable responses because being independent leads to a successful Wrong verb form
had
life
. If the Use synonyms
students
are not given the opportunity to live away from their Use synonyms
family
, Fix the agreement mistake
families
then
their dependence on their parents may hamper their success in Linking Words
life
. Use synonyms
It is clear that
being alone and away from family will be beneficial in later adult Linking Words
life
.
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However
, the major disadvantage of studying away from home is a lack of family support. Linking Words
In other words
, most Linking Words
of
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such
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students
often complain about their sufferings regarding emotional attachments with family and unfulfilled psychological needs. Even the presence of advanced technology platforms Use synonyms
such
as Linking Words
the
social websites and video calling applications Correct article usage
apply
are
not enough to fill their sense of belonging. Correct subject-verb agreement
is
Students
at a young age are vulnerable to Use synonyms
such
emotional Linking Words
feeling
of homesickness and loneliness. Fix the agreement mistake
feelings
For instance
, most Linking Words
of
Change preposition
apply
students
blame Use synonyms
this
factor as Linking Words
Correct article usage
the culprits
culprits
behind their low or failing grades in college.
In conclusion, Fix the agreement mistake
culprit
although
there are disadvantages Linking Words
such
as homesickness, Linking Words
but
learning is a part of Remove the conjunction
apply
life
and how to survive alone is a part of learning, Use synonyms
thus
the advantages of Linking Words
such
independence are more significant.Linking Words
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task response
Provide a more balanced discussion of the advantages and disadvantages of living away from home with more developed supporting points for each side.
coherence cohesion
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