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Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves? Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and with relevant evidence. You should write at least 250 words.

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There was a recent survey conducted
on
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in
 wealthier countries and it has been found that 60% of the nations are not efficient and stable. So, the question here is whether the unstable countries require support from stable countries or it is the duty of their
nation
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’s government to take care of their own people. Let’s discuss
this
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. Countries that are developed generally have more superpowers and they get plenty of resources from various sides. They do not depend on any other
nation
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. So, an efficient
country
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 could support weaker countries in terms of food and
education
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. Resources for food, distribution of ingredients required for food can be supplied to poorer nations by having contact.
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, free
education
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 courses can be conducted in rich countries by inviting students from weaker nations to develop their exposure and knowledge.
For example
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, the Czech Republic which is a super developed
country
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 are inviting people from developing nations
such
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 as Ethiopia, Uganda for providing free
education
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 and
they
of them or themselves
their
 help in various forms. On the other side, it is
also
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 an important duty of the government of poor nations to help needy people in their
country
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 by doing and imposing several benefits. Government should collect revenue from
neighboring
having a common boundary or edge; abutting; touching
neighbouring
 nations or a nominal amount from each of the families in their nations to increase funds. Some of the ways are to provide a quality
education
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 by developing the schools and colleges and appointing the best teachers to the institutions. Added, there should be more employment opportunities to reduce poverty drastically and increase the status of the people and the
country
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.
For example
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,
Geneva which
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Geneva, which
 is a developing poor
nation
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 is now trying to provide more benefits to their
country
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 people by implementing several laws and facilities which are beneficial. To conclude, I would like to say even though if
wealthier nations
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the wealthier nations
 provide some sort of help to poorer, it is their government’s own responsibility to improve the quality and status of the
country
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 and changing the poorer
nation
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 to wealthier
nation
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 in a good manner.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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